What are the advantages and disadvantages of ever-increasing use of technology
Today we cannot imagine our lives without technologies as we live in a modern developed society. There is no doubt that technology has eased the life of human beings. It has proved to be a great boon in the development process of culture and society. However, too much of anything is bad.
First of all, technology has made human life comfortable. Everything that people see and use in a daily life is the gift of technology. The clothes people wear, the mobile phone they carry, the television they watch, the house they live, the car they travel, the bridges are all the examples of successful implementation of technology. Secondly, printing press, internet, telephone, email, and other communication technologies have helped us to communicate on a global scale. For example, now my parents have a great opportunity to talk with relatives via Skype, send lots of messages not worrying about delivery time and use different gadgets that simplified their life. More than that, technology has revolutionized the healthcare industry. Great diagnostic tools such as x-ray machines, blood pressure monitoring machine, laryngoscopes and otoscopes have increased diagnostic accuracy. For instance, I have a sad story about the doctors made the wrong diagnosis so that my aunt died from breast cancer.
On the other hand, the main problem of ever-increasing use technology, in my opinion, is pollution. Scientists have found that too much use of technology has resulted in an increase in waste products into the environment. Besides, some people waste immense time and energy doing non-productive activities such as playing computer games, watching television, browsing and so on. Many adults complain that they do not have time for face-to-face meetings, their children get addicted to their computers and lovers do not pay attention to each other getting stuck in mobile phones. That is the reality. Nevertheless, our health has become price of our comfortable life. The impure air and water are hazardous to human health. Excessive use of smartphones causes stress and posture related health issues. The loud noise of vehicles and running factories disrupts the human auditory senses.
To sum it up, the technology has brought great benefits but we should not forget that we were born in harmony with nature, which suffers because of our inventions.
I'm sorry to read about your aunt. But, in general, I completely agree with your thoughts. Your essay is also quite well-organized and your points are clear and understandable.
ОтветитьУдалитьGreat job!!!
Thanks for sharing your essay draft with us. I had a quick look at it yesterday evening and am going to discuss it with you in class today to help you with its revision.
ОтветитьУдалитьtechnology **had made human life comfortable: WT Why the Past Perfect? It is only used to indicate that 1 action in the past finished before the other action in the past. Here is a good explanation of how it is used: https://writingexplained.org/grammar-dictionary/past-perfect-tense
УдалитьThe clothes **we wear, the mobile phone **we carry, the television **we watch, the house **we live, the car *we travel, the bridges are all the examples of successful implementation of technology."We" is a common form of reference in Russian, while for English the third person plural nouns are more common in this case: > the clothes people wear, mobile phones they carry and so on
Удалитьsend an amount of messages: messages are countable; "amount" is used with [U] nouns. Check the information at https://bit.ly/2ruj5yv
There has been invented various great diagnostic tools: Start with "great diagnostic tools" because it is more common to structure such sentecnes this way
the doctors which **did (WW) the wrong **diagnostic (WW) > the doctors made the wrong diagnosis
the main problem of ever-increasing USE of technology
УдалитьSupporting evidence necessary: Too much use of technology has resulted in an increase in waste products into the environment.You can't just state it
waste immense time and energy **in (PREP) doing non-productive activities
lovers do not pay attention TO WHAT? getting stuck in mobile phones.
has become *a (ART) **cost (WW) of ***our comfortable life.
posture related health issues: meaning not clear
**A (art) loud noise
Azia,
ОтветитьУдалитьyour essay discusses a variety of issues connected with an ever-increasing use of technology well. You have provided a variety of examples that support your point of view.It's also rather logical but your conclusion should be furher developed so that it'd match the content of your essay.
The biggest problem though are connected with incorrect grammar use, the cases of which I have listed in my comment.
I'd advise you to look through my comments and try to revise your essay draft using them.
Good luck!
Hello, Natalia Yurievna! Thank you for your comments, they are very useful. I've revised my essay using your tips and have fixed all the mistakes. Could you, please, check my essay again?
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